Wednesday, October 2, 2013

Blog Post 2

         One of the writing prompts that I really liked was the one about an emotion that we've had. I wrote about happiness, and the time that I climbed a cliff that had the most amazing view from the top. I enjoyed writing about this because it brought back some of the great memories and emotions from that trip and that specific climb. I found it amazing that nobody will ever have the exact same view from that climb as I did during that climb. I felt successful, because I had experienced something in a way that nobody else will ever experience the same way.
          A way that I would develop it into a longer piece is by writing more about my emotions during each part of the climb and describing the view from the top. I only had a brief amount of time to write about each part, so I couldn't describe every way detail about the experience.

7 comments:

  1. I liked how you used descriptive language.

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  2. I liked that you told us a little about your journey in the beginning. Then you went on telling us about how you could fix it and I think you are off to a good start

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  3. Great job Coop stick! That was also my favorite piece to write about. I think that you should have thought about more than just the emotions, even though the prompt was about emotions. Maybe putting more detail into the experience, I understand that you had limited time, but better luck next time brotha! ;-) <3

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  4. Great job Cooper,, hearing about your happy emotions is great for the reader and it makes them want to read more. Keep workin big dog.

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  5. It's its interesting how you're talking about adding detail to your piece because I just read a blog about someone who thought that detail wasn't very important in a piece. They said they hate it when people say detail is the most important thing they like it when you just get to the point. Why do you think detail is important?
    -Juliette

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  6. You did a good job of relating this to yourself and talking about a personal experience that was amazing. It was good but it could have had more detail about the actual experience. Other then that it was very good.

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  7. Great job and ideas cooper! I thought it was interesting how you talked a little about your climb, it really brought my attention.

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